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hi everyone out there! this is akshay asking your help to improve my way of writing. pls help me. do comment if you find anything misspelled, wrong or meaningless to help me improve my way of writing. all these poems starting from my first one R.S.P to my latest one THE ONE EYED SOUL are showcased here to get your thoughts about it and help me improve. pls help me and do spare a moment to give an idea containing the steps to improve my way of writing! pls help me! all kinds of advice accepted.

113) a friend forever

A blooming sun under i retire
The gloomy tree which i despair
To hold on to our dreamy past
Get back to the days i lost.

Smiling tune down my spine
Sends me tears along my spine
Your my blood, the river of life
Your my bread, my mortal strife.

Flowing along our kinship dash
Making our chanted dreams now crash
Together we melt, unity alike
Forever we bind, you and me a like!

Sides of coins not to be torn
Two mortals in a soul, that's how born
You are my aim, the heavenly gate
You bring me fame, every date!

Gave me honors, joy and pride
Made a platform, goals set side
You are the one i dream to live
You are the heart, thy soul you give!

Thou a mystic, a great friend
The only word my heart bend
A fable tale our hearts swirl
A blooming flower, the red whorl!

(meaning of the last line- you are the brightest whorl in a blooming flower!) <

THE UNDERGROUND CAVERNS............... HORROR LAND-3

Still walking lone in an unknown place
Searching my way, for a long back trace
Still unknown of the mystery behind
Somber down, away from light and shine!

Asked my heart why here so?
Go get help when i can,
But where am i, still don't know
With evil behind, i still ran!

Crawling my way through this itchy path,
Thorns and spines tear my cloth
Lone with spiders, rodents and rats
Shiver and quiver along with bats!

What i saw up front row
Got me back on my sweaty show
Now my breath's a fast sped train
God its bad! devil drenched rain!

six and eight, inches i see
Giants and monsters block my way
Spiders, tarantulas is all i see
Itching my creepy stay!

Holding back my breath i dare
They're too large; hold and stare
This lone place filled with bone
Lively men turned to stones.

My heart now panics yet to beat
Standing here on my hiding seat
Oh man! it eats men whole
Up i see an one eyed soul!

to be continued.................................

116) missing moon............. HORROR LAND-2

Still walking down with my left leg hurt
Not lone wounded praised with dirt
Night's fell and starts my bumps
Along with fear my heart now jumps!

Walking lone is blasted courage?
Or sake common this age?
The bluest night makes me shiver
What's up makes words quiver.

Ghostly specimen springs up front
Huge blood eyes, adds with long dents
Seeking me? comes too close
What i see's not some freaky shows!

Not a ghost what am glad
But can't dodge so now sad
What to do? thoughts now roam
Dipped up again in sweaty foam.

Still am far, i can run
But no moon, no flaring sun
Mind now roam escapes abroad
Starts to run, no light as guard.

Pricks and thorns torn back along
Ran now for, follows me a ghostly song
So glad now far from it
Where am i? still no guess.

No moon tonight, a black sky soars
Not known the danger found down way
Walked front down saw a door
What i saw, is in my next say! <

‎115) A lonely place.............. HORROR LAND-1

Holding breath i walk for a want
Blows and hymns, with songs to chant
New feats of glory, or facts of piece
What they get, is am to seize!

Rocking past head a dawn
Whooping's loud, creeping upon
Souls of species? howls of wolves?
Creeping upon a creepy gift!

Freaky smile, ghostly lips,
Walking along with sweaty dips
Creepy now, a snaky lair
Jackals prowl can't gasp an air.

Wooden hammocks lone they swing
Wind's fast, blackened rings
Searching for help far and near
A howling song is all i hear!

Cutting trees i walk my walk
Holding breath (it means tired) but dare to stop
Rocking heavens sling a song
Can't guess how, i'll stay along.

Up a hill dawn now smile
With miles to go i still run
Holding breath new thoughts spurts
A day is up, and have wounds that hurts!
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